9.18.08 Group Critique

Well...

Message:
My message was not very clear. This is good to know now, since I have been staring and making it for so long I fully understand what I am trying to say. They thought it really started getting unclear when the U.S. map comes up.

The intended message would be memorable if it were better understandable. So... hopefully if I can achieve this!!

My group said when I show that two states only have a population of more than 13,000,000 they got confused as to what that had to do with my original message, so I am going to totally take those frames out. They also did not understand how the multiple states added up to = 13,000,000, so I am going to try showing this message visually and with words. This is a key element to my video and it HAS to be understood.

Technical:
It was mentioned the message might be better understand if the states were some how being calculated up to show their total population. As of right now it is not very compelling, dynamic, or appropriate to the assignment because no one understands its message.

My transitions need some works, especially through the changing of the states. This is mostly because I had not finished fixing things from the last critique I had so when the states start showing up they are ALL out of whack. Also from the transition with "13,000,000 will not vote because..." to "only two states have a voting population..." makes the whole message confusing. My group wondered what 2 states had to do with anything and it made them confused. Also they thought the little people should not stay on the screen the whole time because they were expecting them to do something. One transition that was enjoyed was the enlargement of the little red man and the statistic at the end. It was suggested that I do something more like that in order to make it more interesting.

Type and color were discussed slightly but not solid suggestions were given to improve. I think this is only because I had a much larger problem at hand, my whole message was not understood. They did say they did not like the serif font changing to sans serif in the beginning of the video. Also the use of Helvetica at times was a little hard to read, probably because I used 'light'.

The little sound I had was enjoyed by some and not by others. I will need to input more I believe in order to get better feedback.

There is a lot I need to do, many things that I would not have been able to see myself. So... I have a lot to get started on!!